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How does an author edit a narrative for flow by analyzing punctuation?

In this lesson you will learn how to edit a narrative response for flow by analyzing punctuation.

Let‟s Review Write a poem in response to Emily Dickinson’s “The Wind’s Visit”, where the narrator is the wind. Your poem should describe a second visit between the two characters, from the wind’s point of view. The poem should be brief, like Dickinson’s. Your poem should “pick up” where “The Wind’s Visit” left off and your word choice and description should let the reader know how the wind feels or reacts to this visit. Your poem should describe the visit completely, so that the reader has the sense of conclusion by the poem’s end.

Let‟s Review

Writing Process

Generate & plan Draft & revise Edit & publish

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Read closely & analyze

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Write a poem in response to “The Wind’s Visit”, where the wind is the narrator.

Let‟s Review “The Wind‟s Visit” by Emily Dickinson

• Poetry is a unique style of

writing.

• Poetry should have a rhythm or

cadence to its structure.

• Punctuation can help with this

rhythm.

The Wind’s Visit The wind tapped like a tired man, And like a host, “Come in,” I boldly answered; entered then My residence within A rapid, footless guest, To offer whom a chair Were as impossible as hand A sofa to the air. No bone had he to bind him, His speech was like the push Of numerous humming-birds at once From a superior bush.

Core Lesson

Reread your draft, allowing your fluency to be monitored by the punctuation.

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Ask, “Does the piece sound the way it was intended?” Add, delete, edit punctuation to reflect your meaning.

Core Lesson

Again the mistress boldly storms within, unannounced She halts, confused; were you not expecting my return? The room is a small close cell; she the snared rabbit “Who‟s there?” she whimpers And who is alone now? I am a towering statue, seated on a throne She is a cowering peasant at my regal feet leery to raise her head to meet my steely gaze Her muslin dress is a suit of mail as she inches toward the safety of the sofa. She perches like a sparrow on its edge No songbird she- „t is mute – “Why have you come back?” she finally trills. I rise, assuredly; she shivers as a rush Of cooled breeze brushes her frail shoulders. A startled sigh; her tentative fingers beckoned; She leaps to detain me, “Please stay” Through that very door I escaped, Never to return uninvited Banished; she is alone again.

Reread your draft, allowing your fluency to be monitored by the punctuation.

Does the punctuation allow the poem to flow?

Core Lesson

Ask, “Does the piece sound the way it was intended?” Add, delete, edit punctuation to reflect your meaning.

Again the mistress boldly storms within, unannounced She halts, confused; were you not expecting my return? The room is a small close cell; she the snared rabbit “Who‟s there?” she whimpers And who is alone now? I am a towering statue, seated on a throne She is a cowering peasant at my regal feet leery to raise her head to meet my steely gaze Her muslin dress is a suit of mail as she inches toward the safety of the sofa. She perches like a sparrow on its edge No songbird she- „t is mute – “Why have you come back?” she finally trills. I rise, assuredly; she shivers as a rush Of cooled breeze brushes her frail shoulders. A startled sigh; her tentative fingers beckoned; She leaps to detain me, “Please stay” Through that very door I escaped, Never to return uninvited Banished; she is alone again.

Does the punctuation reflect the mood or tone I intended?

Core Lesson

Again the mistress boldly storms within, unannounced She halts, confused; were you not expecting my return? The room is a small close cell; she the snared rabbit “Who‟s there?” she whimpers. And who is alone now? I am a towering statue, seated on a throne She is a cowering peasant at my regal feet leery to raise her head to meet my steely gaze; Her muslin dress is a suit of mail as she inches toward the safety of the sofa. She perches like a sparrow on its edge No songbird she- „t is mute – “Why have you come back?” she finally trills. I rise, assuredly; she shivers as a rush Of cooled breeze brushes her frail shoulders. A startled sigh; her tentative fingers beckoned; She leaps to detain me, “Please stay…” Through that very door I escaped, Never to return uninvited Banished; she is alone again.

Core Lesson

Writing Process

Generate & plan Draft & revise Edit & publish

1 2 3

Read closely & analyze

4

Core Lesson

Reread your draft, allowing your fluency to be monitored by the punctuation.

1 2

Ask, “Does the piece sound the way it was intended?” Add, delete, edit punctuation to reflect your meaning.

In this lesson you have learned how to edit a narrative response by analyzing punctuation.