Here to help: chris@primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk - - PowerPoint PPT Presentation

Here to help:

chris@primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk lindsay@primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Growing Greater Depth Writers: Every Word Counts!

Language playfulness and exploring the possibilities Readers delighting in the author’s craft Drawing on rich literature to develop literary technique Purposeful re-working

@EnglishHubUK

The best writers are the avid readers. Language is acquired through imitation. What are we giving them to imitate?

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Where the learning of language is concerned, delight is more important than anything else…

If the people who look after you...look at picture books with you and don’t rush through with one eye on their watch but take their time to talk with you about what’s going on in the pictures, then the attitude you’re likely to

have towards language will be that you trust it and find it exciting and full of possibilities and fun, something to play with and speculate with and take risks with and delight in.

Philip Pullman

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Playfulness with Language

@EnglishHubUK

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Playfulness with Language

@EnglishHubUK

I don’t want to cross the troll’s bridge.

The man walked down the road.

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Language Experimentation

The woman got out of the car. The troll walked towards the goat.

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

He strode towards the rickety bridge.

• 1. Pronoun
• 2. Verb
• 3. Preposition
• 4. Determiner
• 5. Adjective
• 6. Noun

@EnglishHubUK

Greater Depth

KS1 The pupil can, after discussion with the teacher: write effectively and coherently for different purposes, drawing on their reading to inform the vocabulary and grammar of their writing KS2 Write effectively for a range of purposes and audiences, selecting the appropriate form and drawing independently on what they have read as models for their own writing

This is what GD writers do already. Let’s show everyone how to do it!

Models for Structure

Where do story plans come from?

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Cinderella

• The Invitation Arrives
• The Fairy Godmother
• The Ball
• The Search
• The Shoe Fits
• Football Trial Announced
• The Kind Coach
• The Trial
• The Search
• The Boot Fits

@EnglishHubUK

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Cinderella

• The Invitation Arrives
• The Fairy Godmother
• The Ball
• The Search
• The Shoe Fits
• Invitation to the Coliseum
• Boudicca’s Armour
• Gladiators at the Coliseum
• The Search
• The Sandal Fits

@EnglishHubUK

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Jack and the Beanstalk

Cross-curricular Version starring the young Howard Carter

• Swapping cow for

beans

• Angry mother
• Climbing and stealing
• Chased by giant
• Chopping down the

beanstalk (with mum’s help)

• Swapping the compass for a

mysterious map

• Angry professor
• Searching, digging and stealing
• Chased by The Mummy
• Ending the curse (with

professor’s help)

@EnglishHubUK

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Jack and the Beanstalk Howard Carter and the Mysterious Map

• Swapping cow for

beans

• Angry mother
• Climbing and stealing
• Chased by giant
• Chopping down the

beanstalk (with mum’s help)

• Chased by The Mummy
• Swapping the compass for a

mysterious map

• Angry professor
• Searching, digging and stealing
• Ending the curse (with professor’s

help)

@EnglishHubUK

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Chocolate Factory Children

Child is introduced (WW/Grandpa’s thoughts) Enter the next amazing room Child misbehaves predictably Something terrible happens Oompa-Loompa song!

@EnglishHubUK

Change the Details…

…or “just” retell the story!

Some well-known re-tellers:

Neil Gaiman William Shakespeare Michael Rosen Kevin Crossley-Holland Michael Morpurgo Bradley Cooper

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

The Three Billy Goats Gruff

The grass is better over there! Small BG meets the troll Second BG meets the troll Large BG defeats the troll They all enjoy the grass

@EnglishHubUK

Models for Structure

Drama for Language

Models for Structure

Models for Language

Its claws scraped along the planks, moving menacingly towards the heady scent of the distracted goat. Only the crows noted its brutal form stalking across the beams

• f the bridge,

sensing the quickening rhythm

• f its breath.

@EnglishHubUK

by by Chris & Lindsay

Wolf

His feet padded along the balcony, slinking silently past the closed doors of the other flats. No one glimpsed his shadow flickering across the curtain or noticed the uneven rhythm of his steps.

Gillian Cross

Its claws scraped along the planks, moving menacingly towards the heady scent of the distracted goat. Only the crows noted its brutal form stalking across the beams of the bridge, sensing the quickening rhythm of its breath.

• Us

@EnglishHubUK

His feet padded along the balcony, slinking silently past the closed doors of the other flats. No

• ne glimpsed his

shadow flickering across the curtain

• r noticed the

uneven rhythm of his steps.

• Gillian Cross

The Fox and the Billy Goat

Fox was daydreaming as he trotted

• along. He was thinking of all the

plump little hens he’d caught last night, waiting for him in his nice warm den.

Stories from Aesop Usborne

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

The youngest goat was salivating as he trotted towards the bridge. He was imagining the taste of the lush grass he’d seen, tempting him from the other side.

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk @EnglishHubUK

The Iron Man

The Iron Man came to the top of the cliff. The wind sang through his iron fingers. Never before had the iron man seen the sea. He swayed in the strong wind that pressed against his back.

The troll came to the far side of the bridge. A wicked wind whipped around its brutal form. Not for months had the beast smelt a living creature like this one. It inhaled the strong scent that swirled deliciously around its snout.

@EnglishHubUK

The famine had ended and the dry grass and sparse ferns had been forgotten. Fear itself had passed and a brilliant, deep blue sky arched hopefully over the meadow-land. Never, never had the goats dreamed of lands so green. On the other side of the bridge, skies were hot and blazing and vegetation was burnt and yellow; this sky was of a crisp, refreshing blue which almost seemed to glisten like the waters of some brilliant bottomless lake, and the verdant blanket of land stretched far, far into the distance, on to the hopeful horizon .

Don’ t forget the ending!

@EnglishHubUK

The Secret Garden The rainstorm had ended and the grey mist and clouds had been swept away in the night by the wind. The wind itself had ceased and a brilliant, deep blue sky arched high over the moorland. Never, never had Mary dreamed of a sky so blue. In India skies were hot and blazing; this was of a deep cool blue which almost seemed to sparkle like the waters of some lovely bottomless lake, and here and there, high, high in the arched blueness floated small clouds of snow- white fleece.

Drawing on their reading as models for writing

Synthesis

Selecting appropriate models of language, and combining with the content to create a desired effect

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

We are going to be crafting…

• Tension / Suspense
• Character entrance

(good/ bad)

• Dialogue that shows

character

• Dialogue that moves the

story on quickly

• Fast pace, eg action
• ENDINGS including

reflection

• Time shift/Place shift
• A sense of place (rather

than a description of setting)

• A feeling of relief

…etc… So keep an eye out for / hunt down/ be aware of/ collect AMAZING examples!

@EnglishHubUK

Baby Elephant

Susan Hellard

Although Ephra was the smallest baby elephant in the herd, she had the biggest ears. The trouble was, she didn’t use them. She never listened.

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Rapunzel

Sarah Gibb

Suddenly they came to a clearing, and there in the middle was a tall tower with no door; just a few windows at the very top. … To Rapunzel’s amazement, although the tower was as slender as a tree, inside there was room after beautiful room, lit by thousands of delicate lamps, which glowed as bright as day.

Talk About Short

He was alone, and in the dark; and when he reached out for the matches, the matches were put into his hand.

Kevin Crossley-Holland

The monster showed up just after midnight. As they do. Conor was awake when it

• came. He’d had a nightmare.

Well, not a nightmare. The

• nightmare. The one he’d been

having a lot lately. The one with the darkness and the wind and the screaming. The

• ne with the hands slipping

from his grasp, no matter how hard he tried to hold on.

A Monster Calls

• Patrick Ness

35

The Hound of the Baskervilles

Blindly we ran through the gloom, blundering against boulders, forcing our way through gorse bushes, panting up hills and rushing down slopes, heading always in the direction whence those dreadful sounds had come.

Arthur Conan Doyle

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Alternative Versions “Making it your own”

THINK….. Tell me/ tell each other/ note down… How else could we express this? How else could we start this sentence? What needs to be different in your version? How could we change the order of these sentences? What other language devices might work to develop the mood? (adverbials, similes, personification, exaggeration or understatement, etc)

@EnglishHubUK

is the filter through which ideas and sentences must pass

Handwriting

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk @EnglishHubUK

is not about looking pretty It enables fluency in composition

Handwriting

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk @EnglishHubUK

First rule for redrafting:

Purpose

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk. @EnglishHubUK

Second rule for redrafting:

Think about the dice game

(Every word-choice counts)

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk. @EnglishHubUK

Third rule for redrafting:

Test it out

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk. @EnglishHubUK

primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk @EnglishHubUK

Writing Challenges

• Manipulating

language to create a particular effect:

• Purpose,

Audience, Viewpoint

Flip it!

• Write from a different viewpoint
• Re-write in a different genre

Imitate to innovate

• Write a new scene, paragraph adopting the author’s voice / style.
• Re-write an extra scene / chapter
• Re-write, but change the mood

Add complexity / ban….

• Include use of / ban use of…..

Evaluate and improve!

• Proof-read, edit and re-write

Writers choose own Top Ten Titles

43

Thank you!

chris@primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk lindsay@primaryeducationadvisors.co.uk

Join us @EnglishHubUK