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Presented by:

Jo Quinlan - Teacher Librarian and ICT Integrator Amaris Evans and Charlotte Wells - English Department teachers Sarah Clifton - Head of PDHPE Michele Studd - Head of Learning Support

Writing Across The School Constructing well written paragraphs in a Yr 7 PDHPE class

Components of writing * Writing scaffolds * Using feedback

Jo Quinlan

6th August 2018

Barker Institute

Writing is a complex process

text as a whole word level

Y7 PDHPE task in a Water Safety unit

Write a paragraph in response to: “Swimming lessons should be compulsory for young children” PDHPE syllabus learning outcome:

• selects and uses communication skills and strategies clearly and coherently

English syllabus learning outcome:

• uses and describes language forms, features and structures of texts appropriate to a range of purposes, audiences and

contexts by showing:

• understanding that the coherence of more complex texts relies on devices that signal text structure and

guide readers, for example... paragraphs and topic sentences...

• understanding how cohesion in texts is improved by strengthening the internal structure of paragraphs

Become informed

(eg. by working collaboratively in a google doc to explore and summarise content in the 40 page “Royal Life Saving National Drowning Report 2017”)

Think, clarify, justify, elaborate ideas through talking ...then start writing

Use a scaffold to strengthen the internal structure of paragraphs

Image in public domain

Hamburger paragraph

T.E.X.T paragraph

T opic sentence to introduce your point/idea E xplain/expand on the topic sentence

eX ample(s) to support your point/idea

T ie it back to the topic

P.E.E.L.

(also referred to as T.E.E.L)

Helpful Links

• Types of paragraphs - descriptive, narrative, expository, persuasive

https://www.learnamericanenglishonline.com/Write_in_English/WL10_types_of_paragraphs.html

• Hamburger paragraph example https://tacomacc.libguides.com/c.php?g=373176&p=2523552
• PEEL paragraph sentence starters (click on the second file for a variety of sentence starters around different

concepts) https://www.tes.com/teaching-resource/key-historical-sentence-starters-for-peel-paragraphs-11567472 Tip: Use a search engine to search for PEEL and subject area for some examples and sentence starter ideas (eg. PEEL Geography)

• PETAL - Point, Evidence, Technique, Analyse, Link (helpful for English).

https://www.tes.com/teaching-resource/point-evidence-technique-analysis-link-sentence-starters-print-out-p-e-t-a-l-e ditable-11284508

• UK English teacher blog about expanding on PETAL template (helpful for English)

https://missenglishhead.wordpress.com/2016/03/12/peeling-petals-scaffolding-analysis-essays/

• Creating tables to plan for the TEE in STEEL - Statement, Technique, Example, Explain, Link (Helpful for

English) https://www.artofsmart.com.au/write-band-6-hsc-english-essay/

How we can provide support:

Gradual release of responsibility instructional model

image from ascd.org

independent writing, evaluating and editing peer critiquing & feedback joint construction teacher/parent modelling

Feedback from teacher Feedback from classmates

P E E L

SHARED GOOGLE DOC = see multiple examples; learn from/with a community of learners

“Swimming lessons should be compulsory for young children”

Dylan Wiliam

If there’s a single principle we need to digest about classroom feedback it’s this:

The only thing that matters is what students do with it.

No matter how well the feedback is designed, if students do not use the feedback to move their own learning forward, it’s a waste of time.

Kind, specific and helpful critical friends

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dOSiU42P8Gc

Takeaways:

• Focus on aspects of writing to help

build writing confidence overall

• Memory aids/scaffolds such

as images (eg. hamburger) or acronyms (eg. PEEL) can help writing structure

• Critical friends who give specific

feedback can help us improve

Writing Across The School An English Perspective

Canvas * Success Criteria * Blended Learning

Amaris Evans and Charlotte Wells

6th August 2018

Barker Institute

TOP TAKEAWAYS

• Engage with Canvas with the help of your child and be a

part of the writing process

• Help your child to break down the essay writing process

using self-directed learning so that it isn’t overwhelming

• Creating success criteria will enable your child to be more

confident in approaching a variety of writing tasks

• Make active use of ALL feedback to improve student
• utcomes

Writing Across The School A PDHPE Perspective

Sarah Clifton - Head of PDHPE

6th August 2018

Barker Institute

What teachers see

Don’t know how to start Missed the point of the question.

Write informally or generally. Language and terminology missing.

React poorly to writing activities

Content dump. Thinking and application of knowledge missing Poor quality - hands in writing because the teacher said so.

Looked at mark not feedback

Common Themes on Student Writing

Growth Mindset

41

Date/Month/Year

I’m hopeless at

• writing. I just

can’t do it. I don’t even know how to start. I’ll never be good at it.

I don’t think I’m a very good writer. If I follow advice and keep trying though, I think I can improve.

Confidence can be built from a change in mindset. Fixed Mindset

?

Consequent Behaviour

• Avoid the writing task
• Procrastinate
• Superficial effort

Emotions

• Angry, sad,

demotivated Consequent Behaviour

• Do the writing task
• Get started early
• Best effort

Emotions

• Accepting, positive,

motivated

WATS FOCUS AREAS

WATS FOCUS

Structure

Thinking Skills

Question Interpretation

Faculty &/or stage specific Success Criteria Explanation of how to use scaffolds / seven steps. Question Interpretation Strategies Visible Thinking Routines

How can you help your child with writing?

Strategies to assist student writing

Pre-writing strategies

• 1. Question interpretation
• 2. Planning - teacher scaffolded (PDHPE Yr 7 & 8)

❖ Question Interpretation Strategies ❖ Using Writing Success Criteria in planning

Evaluate the benefits of fitness testing to improving performance.

PDHPE Writing Success Criteria Scaffolded Planning Student Planning

Define subject terminology Fitness Testing Fitness testing involves objective measurement of specific movements that test components of fitness such as flexibility. Answer the “essence” of the question. What are your points / arguments to answer the question? The benefits of fitness testing to improving performance. Can identify areas of strengths and weaknesses so an athlete can plan to improve. Examples - Apply content / arguments through a relevant example Examples that show the benefits of fitness testing Eg: Tests may show strong results in endurance but then lower result in power. Address the Key Verb Use joining words to address the key verb How important is fitness testing to improving performance? Evaluate words

• important, essential, plays a key role ..

important, essential, plays a key role Paragraphs - 1 argument per paragraph. Choose 3 arguments - 3 paragraphs. Each sentence must add something new. Re-read and remove repeated sentences.

WATS

How can you help your child with writing?

Strategies to assist student writing

Writing structure

• 1. Scaffolds
• 2. PEEL Paragraph Structure

WATS - PEEL Scaffolds

Semester 2 Yr 8 PDHPE Project Based Learning Task 2018 Designed by Laura Payne - View on CANVAS

POINT: State / define what the paragraph or response is about and link to the question.

Write an introductory sentence that answers the question.

EXPAND: Describe / explain what you mean in more detail (include facts that you have learnt).

What are the components of health? What does the interaction of components mean? How does this affect a person’s overall level of health?

EXAMPLE: Give a most relevant and specific example/s that shows understanding of what you have said above.

Choose a positive or negative example to show how 2

• r more of the components interact.

How has this affected their overall health? Start your sentence with For example,

LINK: Write a very clear linking sentence that links previous information to the question.

Write a sentence to reinforce/conclude your argument. Start your sentence with Therefore,

WATS - PEEL Scaffolds

Semester 2 Yr 8 PDHPE Project Based Learning Task 2018 Designed by Laura Payne

POINT EXPAND EXAMPLE LINK State/Define The components of health interact to…… Main features/facts The components of health include…. The interaction of the components of health means that… This can affect a person’s health because…… Example to show understanding For example, Linking sentence that relates to the question Therefore, the components of health interact to…..

The following sentence starters may assist you to write your response

How can you help your child with writing?

Strategies to assist student writing

Post Writing Feedback

• 1. Success Criteria Checklist
• 2. Highlighting
• PEEL Paragraph Structure
• Success Criteria

WATS - Self / Peer/ Parent / Teacher Feedback

How to use Writing Success Criteria as feedback. CHECKLIST

Success Criteria Yes / No Includes syllabus terminology and definitions

✓

One point/argument/aspect per paragraph

✓

Each sentence adds something new

✓

Show depth of content knowledge.

✓ (just)

Answers the essence of the question

×

Apply content and show understanding through the best choice example/s.

×

Key Verb addressed

×

Uses joining words

✓ 50

Not relevant. What can’t, should be what can! KEY VERB Missed the essence

• this is not what

the question is asking. Specific EG of health status needed eg: LE, mortality, inequity groups

Success Criteria as feedback with colour coding.

Success Criteria Yes / No Includes syllabus terminology and definitions

✓

One point/argument/aspect per paragraph

✓

Each sentence adds something new

✓

Show depth of content knowledge.

✓

Answers the essence of the question

✓ (just enough)

Apply content and show understanding through the best choice example/s.

✓

Key Verb addressed

✓

Uses joining words

✓ 51

Point Expand Example Link Joining words

TOP TAKEAWAYS

• Reinforce with your child a growth mindset in relation to writing.
• Suggest using strategies for question interpretation and

planning before beginning to write at home.

• Ask questions about paragraph structures such as PEEL that

your child should be using.

• Remind your child to check CANVAS for supports / advice that

may be provided.

• Encourage your child to use self-marking strategies such as

success criteria checklists and highlighting before submission.

Writing Across The School

Michele Studd Head of Learning Support (Pre K-12)

6th August 2018

Barker Institute

What does the research say?

Nine Essential Instructional strategies (Marzano)

• Identifying Similarities and Differences
• Summarizing and Note-making

Teaching approaches (Hattie)

• Concept mapping
• Metacognitive strategies

Seven Recommendations for teaching writing (Graham)

• Increase students’ knowledge about writing

Using tables for comparison (similarities and differences)

Solids Liquids Gas Shape

Sam e & sa – reds o nir No f sa (ta n sa f e cin) No f sa (ta n sa f e cin)

Volume?

Sam um (dic to cor) Sam um Can n – bee t ca cred

Examples

Met, gas, ro Hon, ol, wa Iod as

Diagram

How does Henry V motivate his troops? Make reference to the St George Speech in Henry V

Using tables for planning responses/organising details

Topic Sentence Evidence Technique Explanation Link Intro

x x x x

Para 1

Hen aps o s sor a fd Repin Cas ads

Para 2

Hen aps o h me’s al itt of agso Metr Cumiv Lin Sho nce

Para 3 Para 4 Conclusion

x x x x